max0627lps 发布于十月 4, 2015 分享 发布于十月 4, 2015 · 只看该作者 Well, this is my first post and i just registered about three days ago. The reason that i am using english for this post is my last assignment failed because of my poor grammer. So, this is a great chance to practice my english and get this post done.( two bird one stone =] ). When i was seacrhing some guides for a RPG game, i found this website. When i clicked in, it attracted me very hard because of tons of resources. I saw many game's guide and intro, and the best thing is most of the people here obey rules. When people obey rules, you actually can find something really easy and it is easier to read. I know i need to meet these guys, and it is the reason i registered and having an intro here. I am studying in University in Australia. Its quite boring here, not much i can do here. No clubs, no bars, no friends ]=. The thing interest me the most is playing pc game. I do play csgo and league of legend and some more other games on steam. I am currently doing a science degree, but i am going to change it to IT degree or computer science. I want to be a game programmer in the future. It is not just because i love playing games, it is also about creating a world that have a great different with our real world. And everyone can enjoy in the new world. When they have too much pressure in the real world, they can relax in the new world. Thats why i wanna be a game programmer. And i just have a glance at the forum, it seems some of the people here want to be a game programmer too. i am really looking forward to talk with you guys. And hopefully i can learn something about game programming and enjoy at here. Btw, thanks for watching. And hope you guys can point out if there are something wrong. (and this is by google translate) 好吧，这是我的第一篇文章，我刚刚注册大约三天前。而对于我用英文的原因是我上次的报告因为gammer太水。所以，这是一个很好的机会来练习我的英语水平和完成新手mission。（一石二鸟=]）。 当我正在寻找的RPG游戏的一些指导，我看到了这个网站。而且它已经吸引了，因为吨资源，我很辛苦。我看到了许多游戏的指南和介绍，和最好的事情是大多数这里的人们遵守规则。当人们遵守规则，你居然能找到的东西很容易，易于阅读。我知道我需要满足这些家伙，这是我注册的原因，并在这里有一个介绍。 我在大学就读澳元。它很无聊在这里，没有什么我可以在这里做。没有俱乐部，没有酒吧，没有朋友] =。我唯一能做的，就是玩电脑游戏。我也玩过csgo和洛尔和蒸汽一些其他的游戏。 我目前在做一个科学学位，但我将其更改为IT学位或计算机科学。我想成为一个游戏程序员的未来。这不仅是因为我喜欢玩游戏，这也是有关创建一个世界，与我们的现实世界有很大不同。每个人都可以在一个新的世界享受。当他们在现实世界中那么大的压力，他们能在新的世界中放松身心。这就是为什么我想成为一个游戏程序员。我只是有论坛一看，它似乎有些人在这里想成为一个游戏程序员了。我真的很期待跟你们交谈。希望我可以学到一些关于游戏编程并享受在这里。 顺便说一句，感谢收看。并希望你们能指出，如果有什么问题。 thanks for the opinion by ppzt 链接到点评
18500255717 发布于十月 4, 2015 分享 发布于十月 4, 2015 · 只看该作者 第一眼看到英文我都傻眼了- -，差点脱口而出：can you speak in english？ 链接到点评
max0627lps 发布于十月 4, 2015 作者 分享 发布于十月 4, 2015 · 只看该作者 18500255717 发表于 2015-10-4 11:22第一眼看到英文我都傻眼了- -，差点脱口而出：can you speak in english？ 應該是can you speak madarin? 吧 链接到点评
max0627lps 发布于十月 4, 2015 作者 分享 发布于十月 4, 2015 · 只看该作者 和谐版史莱姆 发表于 2015-10-4 11:25英语这么好，楼主是学霸吗？ 請說我錯在那好嗎？不然我改不了的 我回錯了，怎麼delete這個回復？ 链接到点评
ppzt 发布于十月 4, 2015 分享 发布于十月 4, 2015 · 只看该作者 max0627lps 发表于 2015-10-4 11:32請說我錯在那好嗎？不然我改不了的 我回錯了，怎麼delete這個回復？ 通常来说 And并不作为一句话的开头 尤其是你两句话之间其实并不一定有什么并列关系通常正式文章 尤其是学术文章里也很少用and来连接 in addition, furthermore都更正式一点 For the reason 应该是The reason, use English on this post 我个人感觉应该是 for this post, 或者就更直白一点the reason that I am writing this post in English都可以…… 你现在这个表述读起来还蛮怪的……顺便 英语不好 尤其是语法不太好的时候 写作要尤其避免这种超长的从句…… 第二段 guide应该是可数的吧？ 所以应该是some guides； 然后我觉得应该是guides for a game 而不是of； saw this website应该是find this website……和前面同理后面那个and多余； already要么用完成时要么去掉； obey rules 不需要the 因为也没有特指哪些rules； really easy and easy to read这逻辑我不太懂……以及无数个多余的and 如果你想表达因果关系 用thus； and that is the reason blabla， 第三段，no a no b no c, 为啥前俩你是单数第三个是复数？然后前面nothing i can do, 后面the only thing i can do是自打脸……I do played 是什么鬼 i did play吧？ science degree不是doing来的 study for好一点； it is not only because blabla , but also blabla；后面have different我就不说你了 你还加a是闹哪样……然后前面你既然说了a new world, 后面再提到的时候就要用the new world，而且我觉得直接creating a new world blabla, and everyone would love it就好了； so much 改成 too much我觉得更好；just had a glance at the forum, not just have a look of; it seems that some of the people here want to be, not wanted; 正式essay的话 避免用too, 用as well；looking forward to talk to you guys, not talk with 最后一些题外话 写英语不要一辈子i you we开头啊 这一眼望过去满篇的i i i i真的不好看…… 链接到点评
max0627lps 发布于十月 4, 2015 作者 分享 发布于十月 4, 2015 · 只看该作者 ppzt 发表于 2015-10-4 12:15通常来说 And并不作为一句话的开头 尤其是你两句话之间其实并不一定有什么并列关系 通常正式文章 尤其是学 ... 神啊，可以請你做我的英語老師嗎？ 不過 doing a science degree是聽老外說的，所以我也不太確定 and 開頭是因為習慣了和其他人說話時的壞習慣了 it is not only because blabla , but also blabla because 後面不是不可以用but的嗎？ 链接到点评
ppzt 发布于十月 4, 2015 分享 发布于十月 4, 2015 · 只看该作者 max0627lps 发表于 2015-10-4 14:14神啊，可以請你做我的英語老師嗎？ 不過 doing a science degree是聽老外說的，所以我也不太確定 and 開頭 ... 在国外待的比你久一点 写paper被老板骂的次数比你多一点而已……至于degree搭配什么动词 在美帝我印象里用take/get/study for的多点 好像没听谁说do a degree的 不过这个确实比较随意 没有特别固定的说法 链接到点评
max0627lps 发布于十月 4, 2015 作者 分享 发布于十月 4, 2015 · 只看该作者 萨卡 发表于 2015-10-4 14:21......0分... 可以說一下原因嗎？是因為不有趣，還是別的？ 链接到点评
管理员 萨卡 发布于十月 4, 2015 管理员 分享 发布于十月 4, 2015 · 只看该作者 max0627lps 发表于 2015-10-3 23:35可以說一下原因嗎？ 是因為不有趣，還是別的？ 无论是拼写还是语法, 都惨不忍睹 链接到点评
fdcrane 发布于十月 4, 2015 分享 发布于十月 4, 2015 · 只看该作者 Would be slightly better if you put it this way~ This is my first post since I signed up my account three days ago. The reason for writing in English is that I failed my last assignment due to the poor performance in grammar department. This should, or at least I think it might, improve my English and also set my first step into this somehow unique forum. As I was searching for the guide of an RPG game, I found this forum. I was soon attracted by the load of resources that it provides. With a huge number of games and guides, the forum itself seems to be run in an incredibly disciplinal way, which would certainly make it easier for people to meet their needs. Thus I decided to sign up and give this self-introduction. I am now currently studying in a university in Australia. Life seems to be boring without clubs, bars or even friends, then I found myself drawn to the situation where I play video games for most of my days, which, by the way, includes CS:GO, LoL and other games I own on steam. While struggling for a science degree, I’m actually considering to change my major to computer science. I would really love to be a software engineer because not only my passion for video games, but my will to create a different world, which would be enjoyed by anyone. The place where people can release the stress given by the real world. After browsing through the website, it came into noticed that there are people who are also interested in game developing in the forum. I am really eager to communicate with them and hopefully learn something important. In the end, thanks for putting up with my poor English writing skill and please don’t hesitate to point out when you find anything that I need to correct, adjust or modify. [align=right]From:███████[/align] 链接到点评
max0627lps 发布于十月 4, 2015 作者 分享 发布于十月 4, 2015 · 只看该作者 fdcrane 发表于 2015-10-4 14:41Would be slightly better if you put it this way~ 這個已經不只是slightly better.一看下去真的很簡單明確，諗起來很通順 請問你是專門翻譯的嗎？ 不過 software engineer 和 game programmer 好像不一樣的 链接到点评
ppzt 发布于十月 4, 2015 分享 发布于十月 4, 2015 · 只看该作者 max0627lps 发表于 2015-10-4 15:18這個已經不只是slightly better. 一看下去真的很簡單明確，諗起來很通順 請問你是專門翻譯的嗎？ SE是一个职位 工作内容主要是软件系统的设计和编写具体软件系统是什么没有关系 至于game programmer 或者笼统一点说 programmer 基本可以认为是最笼统的头衔了 基本上只要是个编程的就可以叫programmer…… 所以一般来说 只要能叫SE的都不会说programmer吧…… 链接到点评
管理员 萨卡 发布于十月 4, 2015 管理员 分享 发布于十月 4, 2015 · 只看该作者 fdcrane 发表于 2015-10-3 23:41Would be slightly better if you put it this way~ due to the poor performance in grammar department. due to poor grammar. improve my English and also set my first step into this somehow unique forum "and also" is redundant. guide of an RPG game, I found this forum walkthrough for a RPG game, I stumbled upon this forum Thus I decided to sign up and give this self-introduction. Therefore... Life seems to be boring without clubs, bars or even friends, then I found myself drawn to the situation where I play video games for most of my days, which, by the way, includes CS:GO, LoL and other games I own on steam. remove "to be". sentence is too wordy. 大概看了下... 链接到点评
max0627lps 发布于十月 5, 2015 作者 分享 发布于十月 5, 2015 · 只看该作者 萨卡 发表于 2015-10-5 05:59due to poor grammar. "and also" is redundant. 以後有英語上的問題可以找你們幫忙嗎？ 链接到点评
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